Brendan, Anna, Arizona and Caris

Anna Evita

• 1. “"...Why must you be so recalcitrant?" A male voice stated loudly. It was the same kind of voice her mother used when she wanted to yell, and was attempting to hide it. Anna tiptoed closer as she became scared at the foreign voice inside her home. “
  2. I like that you developed the bond between the mother and the character more as the posts developed.
  3. New man has entered the life of the mother, mother and man fight making Anna angry and aggressive. Possibility for more conflict to arise as male character is further developed
  4. 1) After she gets the new of Mr. Evans, after having seen him in the car in the first blog post, what are her reactions to this? Was she the first to see him? 2) What happened to the father figure in her life? What role might this new man play?
  5. I like that you are developing a narrative for the home life of the character and using a younger voice than most of the characters. At the same time, I would like to see more of a connection to the central story line of Pointe Place if possible, maybe have her mother advise her on the situation or how the chaos of his death has impacted her routine. (also be careful of small grammatical/spelling errors)
  
  
  Brendan Bellman
  1. In her attempt to regain Brendan's attention, the sparkler was left alone to mingle with her hair. The pair didn't work, and so her hair was set on fire. Hermione's screams snapped Brendan out of his pit of shame.
  2. Who is Hermione? Why is she so crazy? What is her relationship to Brendan? These questions adds to Brendan’s mystery. No answers are revealed to the audience in the second blog though.
  3. The curiosity of what’s in the box is one conflict, as well as the question of how to open the box. The actions of Hermione heighten tensions because she puts herself and Brendan in danger with her fires.
  4. How did you react to the knowledge of Mr. Evans death? Have you ever tried to open the box before? If not, why?
  5. Interact more with the main blog, because it says it’s sunny in the main blog, which contradicts your rain. Also, you never seemed to react with Mr. Evans death, which you should probably do to connect with the main storyline.
  
  
  Arizona Smith
  1. She figured it was best to get this over with, so she jumped down from the tree. She’d been up there since 2 am, when her apartment had become too cramped and too boring to stand.
  2. Adds to the mystery more, expands the circle involved with her presence on earth, sets up a future storyline
  3. Someone has spotted her using her alien abilities, and there is another alien presence on earth that has a problem with her
  4. What forced her to leave her home planet, what factors give her her abilities
  5. Maybe pick one agent to focus on as a major character, they seem interesting and I’d rather go deeper with one than shallow with multiple
  
  
  Caris Christie
  1. This is no time to for pizza ingredients, although Caris is getting hungry. This is important.
  2. Caris still hasn’t found out that Mr. Evans is dead. He’s friends with George
  3. He doesn’t understand idioms evidently, which adds confusion on his part. He doesn’t understand why Mr. Evans is gone.
  4. What happened to your parents? What’s your favorite Marvel movie?
  5. Even though Caris isn’t good at making friends his own age, it feels like there should be more characters that are kids.